cover letter

To Whom It May Concern:

I’m really glad that you take your precious time to read my writing portfolio. First, I would like to introduce myself to you. I am a sophomore in Fudan University and major in Accounting. I am an optimistic girl, loving to make friends with others and always willing to help those who are in trouble.

This semester, I entered a class called “Advanced Writing”. The course first attracted my attention because it was taught by a foreign teacher. I had always thought that foreign teachers are for oral lessons, and can hardly imagine a foreigner teaching writing. Maybe it was because of this reason that I chose this course. Then I met Ron here. Ron is a typical American, with a pleasant voice and elegant deportment. It is Ron who first show us what is free writing, what is timed-writing, what is plot summary, and what is peer review. All these really brought me a lot of progress.

Free writing is to write whatever comes to your mind on a certain topic. When you are doing free writing, great emphasis should be put on the content rather than vocabulary and grammer. When nothing comes, just write down “Nothing comes to my mind and I have nothing to say at the moment”. This is a new form of writing for me. At first, I can only think of little and focus on how to structure my sentence perfect. That can hardly improve my writing level. As we do free writing again and again, I got to catch the point. While I am writing, I can think of more and write more.

Exchanging our own work with others and discussing on it is another way of writing that I had learned from this class. I have alwalys been focusing on my own writing, and was not willing to let others work on my articles. But through the peer review, I benefited a lot. When I finished my essay draft one, I found it hard to edit and revise it by myself. It was my partners that gave me really good advice, some of which were even out of my imagination, but were really good ones. Without their help, my revising process wouldn't be that smooth. And that was the way in which my essay was worked out.

We have read four stories this semester. The first story, The Necklace, written by Guy de Maupassant, tells a story about a beautiful but poor woman, Mathilde Loisel, who lost the necklace borrowed from her friend just to “decorate” herself. She worked hard for ten years in order to paid back the debt, but only to found out that the necklace she had lost were not worth that much. The second story, The Americanization of Shadrach Cohen, written by Bruno Lessing, tells a story about Shadrach Cohen, a typical Jewish who refused to be Americanized by his two sons. He managed his company successfully and won the respect of his two sons. The third story, Dead Men’s Path, wrtten by Chinua Achebe, tells a story about Michael Obi, who had tried his best to turn a backward school into a high-standard and beautiful one. But by closing the villagers’ ancestral footpath by force, all his dfforts were ruined. The last story, The Grass-Eaters, written by Krishnan Varma, tells a story about an Indian refugee, who lived in an unimaginable life but told about his life in a rather tender way.

We have also done timed-writing for three times. This form is some what like the “writing” part in tests. We are given a topic or title, 45 minutes, and have to worked out an article. I first considered 45 minutes as enough. But after I have actually done it, I found it not that easy. I always have much to say, and have to organize my sentence perfect, which takes me a lot of time. By timed-writing, I realized that I still have a lot to do in my English writing.

In my going-on process of learning English, I will continue to use the ways that Ron had taught us, to make my writing better and better.

Sincerely,

Anna Y

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essay draft two

Anna Y

May 21, 2007

Draft Two

Obi’s Decision

Superstition can be seen everywhere in the world, while it differs from regions to regions. Though superstition doesn’t have any scientific proof, it does exist in people’s minds. To some extent, it is just like religion, which is deeply rooted among certain people and is hardly being eliminated.

Dead Men’s Path, written by Chinua Achebe, tells a story about Michael Obi, who had tried his best to turn a backward school into a high-standard and beautiful one. However, by closing the villagers’ ancestral footpath by force, all his efforts were ruined. It is not the right way for Obi to deal with the problem he is faced with, and there should be a balance between the respect to a traditional culture and the innovation of civilization.

At the beginning of the story, the author told us that “Ndume Central School had always been an unprogressive school, so the Mission authorities decided to send a young and energetic man to run it. Obi accepted this responsibility with enthusiasm.”(52) Yes, Michael Obi was a young and energetic man. He was full of dreams and was ambitious to make his dreams become true. As for Obi’s wife, “She had become completely infected by his passion for ‘modern methods’ and his denigration of ‘these old and superannuated people in the teaching field who would be better employed as traders in the Onitsha market.”(52) Obi was such the kind of person, he was so sticked to his own way of thinking, and can hardly find a balance between innovation and tradition, which was the key to his first success in running the school well, but also the beginning of his final failure.

After Obi and his wife’s hard work, Ndume Central School had gradually become a high-standard and beautiful one. Then comes the turning point. “One evening as Obi was admiring his work he was scandalized to see and old woman from the village hobble right across the compound, through a marigold flower bed and the hedges.”(53) When he asked an old teacher about this, he got the answer that “the path appears to be very important to them. Although it is hardly used, it connects the village shrine with their place of burial.”(53) And he also got and a piece of information that “There was a big row some time ago when we attempted to close it.”(53) At that time, Obi should have known that it wouldn’t be a sensible idea to close the path, anyway, it was important to the villagers.

Then Obi did what he was stick to, which maybe the worst behavior he had done in his whole life. He closed the path. Obi was soon called on by the village priest. The priest was one of the most respectful people in a village and what he said should really be adopted. The priest told Obi that “This path was here before you were born and your father was born. The whole life of this village depends on it. Our dead relatives depart by it and our ancestors visit us by it. But most important, it is the path of children coming in to be born…”(54) The priest’s words were sincere and persuasive, he knew that the path is superstition to some extent, but he also knew the importance of it. The path is more like a comfort and tradition for the villagers. Obi should have noticed that his closing the path would be a wrong way to deal with the problem and there should be a balance..

But what a shame! His answer to the priest was “the whole purpose of our school is to eradicate just such beliefs as that. Dead men do not require footpaths. The whole idea is just fantastic. Our duty is to teach your children to laugh at such ideas.”(54)

That was Obi’s final decision. Maybe we shouldn’t blame for him more. For Obi was that kind of person, stubborn and innovative deep in mind. It is so hard for others to let him admit what he thought was wrong and change his mind. But what will happen if he did it in another way? Maybe he should reserve the path, plant some flowers and grass along it, and made it look like an ordinary path. In that case, villagers can pass through it without destroying Obi’s beautiful garden and Obi’s future could be completely different. Anyway, what Obi should keep in mind was that there should be a balance between the respect to a traditional culture and the innovation of civilization.

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